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• Each section does not include introductory arguments. For example, in Sec. II, in the introductory argument, it only describes the need for microprocessor. It should be more elaborated about what is done, why is done how.
• Detail discussion in Sections II and III need to be rearranged. Modeling and theoretical background can be discussed in Section II and the experimental setup and procedures can be discussed in Section III. Section IV can be discussed in Sections II and III. I would recommend to separate the sections into two: modeling and control for Section II, and experiment for Section III.

appendix 에 label 달았을때 A.1 로 안나오고 그냥 1 로 나옴

• Abstract should contain the important contributions in detail in short. They have to be explicitly discussed. For example, ‘desired movement’ is not clear. Does that mean a position control (point to point or trajectory) or velocity control? It is not clearly discussed how the efficient cooling is achieved.
• The title does not reflect the contents of the abstract. What do you mean by ‘sustainable’? What attributes the sustainability?

• Page 1: Yip et al.: need a reference number.
• Detail discussion on each previous work should be discussed in the paper.
• The citation formation of [10] is wrong.

• Abstract 수정
• Subject related previous work, for example cooling and sustainable control, should be discussed.
• Each section does not include introductory arguments.
• experiments_v2.tex 에서 TODO 들 하기

거의 다했다(?) 힘내자

\usepackage{hyperref}

• Literature review should be done more carefully. Each work should be more elaborated about their contributions and limitations.
• Subject related previous work, for example cooling and sustainable control, should be discussed.
• Table A-1 is good to show. In note column, website to the product would be helpful for the readers.
• Experimental setup should be discussed in detail. One of the fundamental functions of the research papers is to show the detail information for readers in the related research field so that third parties can replicate the result without consulting the authors.

• It is hard to find the contribution of the work in the paper.
• Evaluation on the forced cooling should be compared to natural cooling or previous work.

Cite를 하라고!! 논문 검색 !!

• The performance should be compared with unforced or other cooling methods.
• Cooling performance itself should be studied.